"Start" Map Dialogue Errors

[Pretentious]

If you have any questions, disagree with anything I've posted, or don't understand what I'm saying, then contact me and we can discuss it. Everyone makes mistakes.

 

 

All of these issues are on the "Start" Map.

 

1. This has been changed recently, but I think it should be changed back. Informational sign posts should definitely have periods at the end. Sign posts which are used in this manner should not have them. She isn't just a neighbour who greets people... she's THE Greeting Neighbour.

 

 

 

2. Comma splice. You can't connect two independent clauses with a comma.

 

 

 

3. Compound sentence.

 

 

 

4. Comma splice.

 

 

 

5. Comma splice.

 

 

 

6. Too many periods. <3

 

 

 

7. Comma splice.

 

 

 

8. I think I read somewhere that y'all decided to always capitalize "Pokemon Trainer".

 

 

 

9. These are duplicate images. I'm pretty sure you can combine all three of these to make them easier to read.

 

 

 

10. Comma splice and a suggestion.

 

 

 

11. Comma splice.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Start House 1 Map

 

1. Suggestion. Where I'm from, nobody would say this phrase the way it is written. If it's used this way in other places, then just ignore my suggestion. :D Sorry for the bad LOC. I'm sure you can find it, though.

 

 

 

2. Idiom. Technically, you can still use "was", but you have to change "this" to "that" no matter how you write it. **OR** you can leave it the way you have it if you want Catty Del Rey to give off a foreign vibe. ;)

 

 

 

3. Speaking vs Reading. This one really grinds my gears for some reason.